Unit 9: Health, Mind & Well-being

Writing: The Report

Task (Cambridge C1 Advanced, Part 2)

Context: You are a member of a local community centre that has recently introduced several new programmes focused on mental health and physical well-being (such as yoga classes, mindfulness workshops, and nutrition seminars). The centre's management has asked for feedback to decide which programmes to continue and which to discontinue.

Task: Write a report for the management committee. In your report, you should: * Evaluate the effectiveness of the current well-being programmes. * Discuss the feedback received from participants. * Make recommendations for future health-related activities.

Word count: 220–260 words.

Tips (en español)

Para este tipo de tarea, sigue estas estrategias para asegurar una puntuación alta:

• Structure: Utiliza subtítulos claros para cada sección (e.g., Introduction, Evaluation of current programmes, Recommendations). Esto es vital en un report.
• Register: Mantén un tono formal y objetivo. Evita contracciones (use do not instead of don't) y evita el lenguaje coloquial.
• Linking: Usa conectores de transición para guiar al lector entre ideas (e.g., Furthermore, However, In addition). No te limites a "and" o "but".
• Hedging: En el nivel C1, no afirmes cosas de forma absoluta. Usa lenguaje cauteloso para sonar más profesional (e.g., It would appear that... o The results suggest...).
• Evaluación de ideas: No te limites a listar hechos; analiza el impacto. No digas solo "la clase de yoga es buena", di "la clase de yoga ha demostrado mejorar el bienestar emocional de los participantes".
• Time management: Dedica unos 45 minutos a esta tarea. 5 min para planificar, 35 min para escribir y 5 min para revisar errores gramaticales o de ortografía.

Useful language

Model answer

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Report on Community Well-being Programmes

Introduction The purpose of this report is to evaluate the effectiveness of the recent health and well-being programmes introduced at the community centre. It also aims to provide recommendations for future activities based on participant feedback.

Evaluation of Current Programmes The introduction of mindfulness workshops and yoga classes has been largely successful. Feedback suggests that these sessions have significantly reduced stress levels among regular attendees. Furthermore, the nutrition seminars have proven to be highly informative, with many participants noting a positive impact on their daily dietary habits.

However, it was observed that attendance for the late-evening sessions has been somewhat inconsistent. While the content remains valuable, the timing appears to be a deterrent for working professionals.

Participant Feedback A majority of participants expressed high levels of satisfaction, particularly regarding the instructor's expertise. Nevertheless, some individuals suggested that the workshops could be more interactive. There was also a recurring request for more physical activities that cater to different fitness levels, as the current yoga classes are perceived as being somewhat advanced.

Recommendations Based on the aforementioned findings, the following actions are recommended: 1. Adjust scheduling: To increase attendance, some sessions should be moved to weekend mornings or lunchtimes. 2. Diversify activities: Introducing beginner-level fitness classes would broaden the centre's appeal. 3. Interactive elements: Future workshops should incorporate more practical, hands-on activities to maintain engagement.

Conclusion In conclusion, while the current programmes are successful, minor adjustments to scheduling and variety would ensure long-term sustainability and higher engagement.

(260 words)

Marking checklist

• Content: ¿Has respondido a todos los puntos de la tarea? ¿Es la información relevante para el lector (el comité)?
• Communicative Achievement: ¿Has mantenido el tono formal de un report? ¿Has usado un lenguaje objetivo y profesional?
• Organisation: ¿Has usado subtítulos claros? ¿Están las ideas organizadas de forma lógica mediante conectores y párrafos?
• Language: ¿Has demostrado un vocabulario avanzado y estructuras gramaticales complejas (pasiva, condicionales, hedging) sin cometer errores básicos?

Vocabulario para Writing & Speaking

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